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Chapter One In This Compacted Book. by Will Dockery
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Will Dockery
2004-02-02 08:43:13 UTC
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Chapter One In This Compacted Book.

Secret smile,
secret look,
well the fact is this is nothing,
compared to me.

This could be done, many things,
but he just don't care,
because he can't fall for that again.
Seems like a nice guy,
and may very well be ---
let time work a slow spell ---
this can be so easy just open up.

Coming around again,
got the look of love.
Why this story - it's only bad because I know.
What set up can this accomplish?

How about a new scene,
one that don't involve our distances.
How about a new dream,
a couple of free instances,
a plagiarised scream.

He got himself a simple twist of fate,
provides the code words --- got the look.
Making the rounds,
music, muse and mane.
She's organizing furniture,
plain and discarded pain.

She comes late,
she comes loud with an echo.
Coming around again ---
it's funny --- the night glistens.

He's a security guard at
a rainbow dreamtown storage unit...
the sound in the night,
she comes late.

I hear footsteps, a simulation, familiar, ringing on wood.
Woodgrain beckons me now at this point,
hazel, green, razor, stare,
got the look of love for him.

There's a green leafed twig
to let him know the color coded message,
later she comes again.

Coming around again,
got that devouring green eyed look again, by candle light,
at the storage unit.

My mind's eye sees --- sees
coming around again.

-Will Dockery (c)2002
Will Dockery
2004-02-02 20:24:27 UTC
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Post by Will Dockery
Chapter One In This Compacted Book.
Secret smile,
okay, so this is technically PC...
Post by Will Dockery
secret look,
well the fact is this is nothing,
compared to me.
This could be done, many things,
but he just don't care,
because he can't fall for that again.
Seems like a nice guy,
foreshadowing that he no are no nice guy?
Nice, depending on the perspective... not so nice from mine! Long time ago,
though.
Post by Will Dockery
and may very well be ---
let time work a slow spell ---
this can be so easy just open up.
Coming around again,
got the look of love.
"lake" is misspelled here
"Lake Of Tears"?
Post by Will Dockery
Why this story - it's only bad because I know.
What set up can this accomplish?
How about a new scene,
one that don't involve our distances.
How about a new dream,
a couple of free instances,
a plagiarised scream.
He got himself a simple twist of fate,
i think you intended to write "simple twist up dave", but perhaps your pen
wouldn't twist around that way?
Hmmm... a Brother Dave reference could work well, here...
Will

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Will-Dockery
2024-07-27 13:13:49 UTC
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Post by Will Dockery
Chapter One In This Compacted Book
Secret smile
secret look
well the fact is this is nothing
compared to me
This could be done, many things
but he just don't care
because he can't fall for that again
Seems like a nice guy
and may very well be --
let time work a slow spell --
this can be so easy just open up
Coming around again
got the look of love
Why this story - it's only bad because I know
What set up can this accomplish
How about a new scene
one that don't involve our distances
How about a new dream
a couple of free instances
a plagiarised scream
He got himself a simple twist of fate
provides the code words --- got the look
Making the rounds
music, muse and mane
She's organizing furniture
plain and discarded pain
She comes late
she comes loud with an echo
Coming around again --
it's funny --- the night glistens
He's a security guard a
a rainbow dreamtown storage unit..
the sound in the night
she comes late
I hear footsteps, a simulation, familiar, ringing on wood
Woodgrain beckons me now at this point
hazel, green, razor, stare
got the look of love for him
There's a green leafed twi
to let him know the color coded message
later she comes again
Coming around again
got that devouring green eyed look again, by candle light
at the storage unit
My mind's eye sees --- see
coming around again
-Will Dockery (c)200
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