mined poetry / Venus / K

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Venus
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In her red hat, she's a bombshell.
She's the damsel on the halfshell.
She can lure her victims sweetly
in a web of sticky lust.

So you'd better keep your guard on
or she'll catch you with a hardon.
Though the foolish may deny her,
she will never go away.

So you think you've met Inanna,
then you'd best watch your banana,
for Our Lady has strange hungers
and her teeth are razor sharp.

[Hillbilly Joe]

Post by k***@gmail.com
Venus
------
In her red hat, she's a bombshell.
She's the damsel on the halfshell.
She can lure her victims sweetly
in a web of sticky lust.
So you'd better keep your guard on
or she'll catch you with a hardon.
Though the foolish may deny her,
she will never go away.
So you think you've met Inanna,
then you'd best watch your banana,
for Our Lady has strange hungers
and her teeth are razor sharp.

For instance, I did not like this one as much as other poems of yours, so I passed it by...

Only commenting now for example purposes...

[k***@gmail.com]

Post by Hillbilly Joe

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Venus
------
In her red hat, she's a bombshell.
She's the damsel on the halfshell.
She can lure her victims sweetly
in a web of sticky lust.
So you'd better keep your guard on
or she'll catch you with a hardon.
Though the foolish may deny her,
she will never go away.
So you think you've met Inanna,
then you'd best watch your banana,
for Our Lady has strange hungers
and her teeth are razor sharp.

For instance, I did not like this one as much as other poems of yours, so I passed it by...
Only commenting now for example purposes...

Thanks zod

[Zod]

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Post by Hillbilly Joe

Post by k***@gmail.com
Venus
------
In her red hat, she's a bombshell.
She's the damsel on the halfshell.
She can lure her victims sweetly
in a web of sticky lust.
So you'd better keep your guard on
or she'll catch you with a hardon.
Though the foolish may deny her,
she will never go away.
So you think you've met Inanna,
then you'd best watch your banana,
for Our Lady has strange hungers
and her teeth are razor sharp.

For instance, I did not like this one as much as other poems of yours, so I passed it by...
Only commenting now for example purposes...

Thanks zod

Still does have some points of merit., though...

[General-Zod]

Post by k***@gmail.com
Venus
------
In her red hat, she's a bombshell.
She's the damsel on the halfshell.
She can lure her victims sweetly
in a web of sticky lust.
So you'd better keep your guard on
or she'll catch you with a hardon.
Though the foolish may deny her,
she will never go away.
So you think you've met Inanna,
then you'd best watch your banana,
for Our Lady has strange hungers
and her teeth are razor sharp.

Having another read, quite excellent....