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Pitiful Pit (REPOST) / A Poem by Roach / cheesetray productions
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cheesetray
2024-05-08 21:23:20 UTC
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Pitiful Pit / Down at the Bottom


In Love
..with Demented Asshole.
Devil stealthily...
stealing your Soul ‒

a Living Anarchy...
..of lawless illusions;
Cloudy dreams,
and Phantom delusions ‒

Never-ending Torturer,
hard Rain:
drugs, teachers,
to scramble your brain,
drowning,
in Depression and Pain ‒

Psychotic spiral Mind Fucks,
Fire down Below,
drugs to save you,
‒ a burning Inferno.

The fine line between:
Genius and Madness:
raging Machine ‒ Engine
running too fast.

Mental Exile
..in a musty Prison cell ‒
Walking the Suicide plank...
to Satan's Hell ‒

No other roads,
no exit,
options are few...
Cracking, Screaming,
it turns inward
and Attacks you ‒

Breaking, call the Doctor
on the telephone line:
“Go for a walk,
get some perspective,
you'll feel F.I.N.E.…”


Roach Ω
cheesetray
2024-05-08 22:47:17 UTC
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Pitiful Pit / Down at the Bottom
In Love
...with Demented Asshole.
Devil stealthily...
stealing your Soul ‒
a Living Anarchy...
...of lawless illusions;
Cloudy dreams,
and Phantom delusions ‒
Never-ending Torturer,
drugs, teachers,
to scramble your brain,
drowning,
in Depression and Pain ‒
Psychotic spiral Mind Fucks,
Fire down Below,
medicine to save you,
‒ from a burning Inferno.
raging Machine ‒ Engine
running too fast.
Mental Exile
...in a musty Prison cell ‒
Walking the Suicide plank...
to Satan's Hell ‒
No other roads,
no exit,
options are few...
Cracking, Screaming,
it turns inward
and Attacks you ‒
Breaking, call the Doctor
“Go for a walk,
get some perspective,
you'll feel F.I.N.E.…”
Roach Ω
i changed it to medicine instead of drugs again although they are also called drugs

not so sure about the "from" what does anybody think?
cheesetray
2024-05-09 00:04:30 UTC
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Roach Ω
i changed it to medicine instead of drugs again although they are also called drugs
not so sure about the "from" what does anybody think?
i changed it to meds....the s's...

and i don't think from really fits. (rhythm)

sorry, i thought it was done a while ago....ho hum....
Golda
2024-05-09 14:24:33 UTC
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Pitiful Pit / Down at the Botto
In Lov
...with Demented Asshole
Devil stealthily...
stealing your Soul â€
a Living Anarchy...
...of lawless illusions;
Cloudy dreams,
and Phantom delusions â€
Never-ending Torturer,
hard Rain
drugs, teachers,
to scramble your brain,
drowning
in Depression and Pain â€
Psychotic spiral Mind Fucks,
Fire down Below,
drugs to save you
‒ a burning Inferno.
raging Machine ‒ Engine
running too fast
Mental Exile
...in a musty Prison cell â€
Walking the Suicide plank...
to Satan's Hell â€
No other roads,
no exit,
options are few..
Cracking, Screaming,
it turns inward
and Attacks you â€
Breaking, call the Doctor
on the telephone line
“Go for a walk,
get some perspective,
you'll feel F.I.N.E.
â€
Roach Î
no, i think i'm going to leave as i

sorr


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W.Dockery
2024-05-11 22:34:33 UTC
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Post by cheesetray
Pitiful Pit / Down at the Bottom
In Love
...with Demented Asshole.
Devil stealthily...
stealing your Soul ‒
a Living Anarchy...
...of lawless illusions;
Cloudy dreams,
and Phantom delusions ‒
Never-ending Torturer,
drugs, teachers,
to scramble your brain,
drowning,
in Depression and Pain ‒
Psychotic spiral Mind Fucks,
Fire down Below,
drugs to save you,
‒ a burning Inferno.
raging Machine ‒ Engine
running too fast.
Mental Exile
...in a musty Prison cell ‒
Walking the Suicide plank...
to Satan's Hell ‒
No other roads,
no exit,
options are few...
Cracking, Screaming,
it turns inward
and Attacks you ‒
Breaking, call the Doctor
“Go for a walk,
get some perspective,
you'll feel F.I.N.E.…”
Roach Ω
Another interesting poem, Rachel.

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