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Will Dockery
2020-04-23 20:05:49 UTC
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Works of Art

She painted Henry Conley
She painted Bob Dylan
But she never painted me.

-Will Dockery 2020
Z***@none.i2p
2020-04-25 05:42:22 UTC
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Will Dockery wrote on Thu, 23 April 2020 20:05
Post by Will Dockery
Works of Art
She painted Henry Conley
She painted Bob Dylan
But she never painted me.
-Will Dockery 2020
Quite nice short poem... brutal and to the point...
Will Dockery
2020-04-25 15:02:01 UTC
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Post by Will Dockery
Works of Art
She painted Henry Conley
She painted Bob Dylan
But she never painted me.
-Will Dockery 2020
The "she" who forms the poem's subject is never identified. OTOH, Henry Conley, an aging garage band guitar player who no one outside of Will's hometown has ever heard of, is identified.
[...]

Thanks for the critique, Pendragon, and as I predicted a few days before posting this poem:

https://groups.google.com/d/msg/alt.arts.poetry.comments/XZk3jKDdmS0/RWUd1F-8AAAJ

Of course, this one fits well in the "work of art" theme for this week.

I had some real issues on such a short poem this week, whether to go on longer, with more details, whether or not to use real names, and so on.

In the end, I opted to post the short poem just as written, and so far I'm keeping it that way... I expect the critique to be harsh, but...

"Them's the breaks."

;)
Z***@none.i2p
2020-04-25 16:26:19 UTC
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Will Dockery wrote on Sat, 25 April 2020 15:02
Post by Will Dockery
Post by Will Dockery
Works of Art
She painted Henry Conley
She painted Bob Dylan
But she never painted me.
-Will Dockery 2020
The "she" who forms the poem's subject is never identified. OTOH, Henry Conley, an aging garage band guitar player who no one outside of Will's hometown has ever heard of, is identified.
[...]
https://groups.google.com/d/msg/alt.arts.poetry.comments/XZk3jKDdmS0/RWUd1F-8AAAJ
Of course, this one fits well in the "work of art" theme for this week.
I had some real issues on such a short poem this week, whether to go on longer, with more details, whether or not to use real names, and so on.
In the end, I opted to post the short poem just as written, and so far I'm keeping it that way... I expect the critique to be harsh, but...
"Them's the breaks."
;)
Yes....

"Less is more...."

As Hemingway put it....
Will Dockery
2020-05-28 18:36:20 UTC
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Will Dockery wrote on Sat, 25 April 2020 15:02
Post by Will Dockery
Post by Will Dockery
Works of Art
She painted Henry Conley
She painted Bob Dylan
But she never painted me.
-Will Dockery 2020
The "she" who forms the poem's subject is never identified. OTOH, Henry Conley, an aging garage band guitar player who no one outside of Will's hometown has ever heard of, is identified.
[...]
https://groups.google.com/d/msg/alt.arts.poetry.comments/XZk3jKDdmS0/RWUd1F-8AAAJ
Of course, this one fits well in the "work of art" theme for this week.
I had some real issues on such a short poem this week, whether to go on longer, with more details, whether or not to use real names, and so on.
In the end, I opted to post the short poem just as written, and so far I'm keeping it that way... I expect the critique to be harsh, but...
"Them's the breaks."
;)
Yes....
"Less is more...."
As Hemingway put it....
I find that call must be made on a poem-by-poem basis, of course.
Zod
2020-05-28 20:46:00 UTC
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Will Dockery wrote on Sat, 25 April 2020 15:02
Post by Will Dockery
Post by Will Dockery
Works of Art
She painted Henry Conley
She painted Bob Dylan
But she never painted me.
-Will Dockery 2020
The "she" who forms the poem's subject is never identified. OTOH, Henry Conley, an aging garage band guitar player who no one outside of Will's hometown has ever heard of, is identified.
[...]
https://groups.google.com/d/msg/alt.arts.poetry.comments/XZk3jKDdmS0/RWUd1F-8AAAJ
Of course, this one fits well in the "work of art" theme for this week.
I had some real issues on such a short poem this week, whether to go on longer, with more details, whether or not to use real names, and so on.
In the end, I opted to post the short poem just as written, and so far I'm keeping it that way... I expect the critique to be harsh, but...
"Them's the breaks."
;)
Yes....
"Less is more...."
As Hemingway put it....
I find that call must be made on a poem-by-poem basis, of course.
Good point........
Rocky
2020-04-29 23:35:12 UTC
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Post by Will Dockery
Post by Will Dockery
Works of Art
She painted Henry Conley
She painted Bob Dylan
But she never painted me.
-Will Dockery 2020
The "she" who forms the poem's subject is never identified. OTOH, Henry Conley, an aging garage band guitar player who no one outside of Will's hometown has ever heard of, is identified.
[...]
https://groups.google.com/d/msg/alt.arts.poetry.comments/XZk3jKDdmS0/RWUd1F-8AAAJ
Of course, this one fits well in the "work of art" theme for this week.
I had some real issues on such a short poem this week, whether to go on longer, with more details, whether or not to use real names, and so on.
In the end, I opted to post the short poem just as written, and so far I'm keeping it that way... I expect the critique to be harsh, but...
"Them's the breaks."
;)
You nailed it, Doc....
Z***@none.i2p
2020-05-22 06:19:07 UTC
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Will Dockery wrote on Sat, 25 April 2020 15:02
Post by Will Dockery
Post by Will Dockery
Works of Art
She painted Henry Conley
She painted Bob Dylan
But she never painted me.
-Will Dockery 2020
The "she" who forms the poem's subject is never identified. OTOH, Henry Conley, an aging garage band guitar player who no one outside of Will's hometown has ever heard of, is identified.
[...]
https://groups.google.com/d/msg/alt.arts.poetry.comments/XZk3jKDdmS0/RWUd1F-8AAAJ
Of course, this one fits well in the "work of art" theme for this week.
I had some real issues on such a short poem this week, whether to go on longer, with more details, whether or not to use real names, and so on.
In the end, I opted to post the short poem just as written, and so far I'm keeping it that way... I expect the critique to be harsh, but...
"Them's the breaks."
;)
Right on.....!!!
Zod
2020-05-23 21:59:00 UTC
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Good minimalism.....
m***@yahoo.com
2020-04-25 19:10:03 UTC
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Post by Will Dockery
Works of Art
She painted Henry Conley
She painted Bob Dylan
But she never painted me.
-Will Dockery 2020
That's because you look like you escaped from a mental hospital in the early 1970s, Will.
Will Dockery
2020-04-26 13:42:11 UTC
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Post by Will Dockery
Works of Art
She painted Henry Conley
She painted Bob Dylan
But she never painted me.
-Will Dockery 2020
That's because you look like you escaped from a mental hospital in the early 1970s, Will.
Two words, Dink:

War Room.

;)
m***@yahoo.com
2020-05-30 16:54:34 UTC
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Post by Will Dockery
Works of Art
She painted Henry Conley
She painted Bob Dylan
But she never painted me.
-Will Dockery 2020
That's because you look like you escaped from a mental hospital in the early 1970s, Will.
War Room.
;)
Two words, Twattery :

You suck.
Rocky
2020-05-31 01:16:28 UTC
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Post by Will Dockery
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Post by Will Dockery
Works of Art
She painted Henry Conley
She painted Bob Dylan
But she never painted me.
-Will Dockery 2020
That's because you look like you escaped from a mental hospital in the early 1970s, Will.
War Room.
;)
Ha ha ha....

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